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I'm very amatuer. This is my first time really throwing out what I write for people to critique. I've been writing for about 3 years, so it's not anything new. I just recently started playing guitar, and recently tried throwing together a joke metal/emo album with my friends. This is not my best, but I just wanted to throw it out here and see what you all thought.

It started out as a sickness
It ended up as an epidemic
Feading off my weakness
I started to just grow tired of you

No matter where you we're
I was always there to find you
And even if you lied
My eyes would always deceat you

I'm stuck on this sickness
My body can barly take you
I'm sick of my sickness
Your lies will no longer hide you

It started out as a script
Your lies twisted it into a novel
Growing longer each day
My mind couldn't read you

I'm looking for answers
Your just trying to find a way through
The lies have caught up to you
And my eyes hate looking at you

I'm stuck on this sickness
My body can't find a way through
I'm sick of your sickness
Your lies will no longer hide you

I made the antidote
Just from watching you
We'll take the antidote
Then will be safe from YOU

Let's take the antidote
And We'll be safe Now

I'm stuck on this sickness
My body can barly take you
I'm sick of this sickness
I'm not going to chase after you