#1
I hope my title does not break the extra characters rule, That is what I named it.anyways, new piece, different style,enjoy.

[So much_______space]

Precipitation drips from maple leaves
Drowning out my thoughts,
Leaving, certain uncertainties

[____Doubt___________]

Cold, numbed my sympathy,
on the windy, winter day
Finding a self, filled with apathy

[____Realization_______]

Indulging in my pain,
spare me your pity,
I cope with this my way

[____Denial___________]

Look at the spaces,
So much room,
So much room.... for self-improvement

[___Understanding____]
#2
Um...it's going to be hard to convey those textual spaces with vocals
#3
maybe it's not a song but a poem or something similar. anyways, i thought it was fantastic, the last stanza pretty much summed it up and left we wanting for more. overall ,great job. there are somethings that i dont like but i dont feel like typing them down, plus they're small itty bitty things, nothing that big. keep up the good work
The trouble with nude dancing is that not everything stops moving when the music does.

Last.fm
#4
To Yawn: In concert i'm going to start yelling, "BRACKET, UNDERSCORE, UNDERSCORE, UNDERSCORE, DOUBT, UNDERSCORE, UNDERSCORE, BRACKET!"


[EDIT] thank you green fox, it means a lot
Last edited by DanteR* at Jun 11, 2006,
#5
wow man that was pretty brilliant man, "certain uncertainties" i loved that, man this was a nice read man, pretty simple but can be a little complex, but nothing to wrong with it man, i loved it. nice job, sorry couldnt give a better crit, theres nothing wrong with it, at least i think. ACE
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#6
Good Job. "Certain Uncertainties" is brilliant.

Just, good stuff. 9/10. Can't complain. You had the idea, and you pulled it off