#1
This is a song I wrote a few days ago
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This loneliness deep inside my core
This uncomfortable feeling ringing throughout my soul
I cannot shake it I cannot shake it
I wish you were here I wish you were speaking to me
This hurricane of horrible emotions inside myself
I cannot shake it I cannot shake it

I want to go home I want to leave
I know this is where you live and you?re trying to please
But I need somewhere when I can be in peace
Home is bittersweet for me
I love it when I?ve been gone and it when I?ve been home
I wish there was someone I could show
What and why I?m feeling as though my heart is being ripped out of my chest
I need somewhere where I can lay my head to rest
I feel like I want to cry I almost wish that I could die
I just want to be home

Please just talk to me
I need you to love me and be
My best friend again
I don?t want to be here can?t you just comfort me
I just want to cry till I die
Go break my soul, you?re making me uncomfortable
And now you, I cannot shake you I cannot shake you

I?m sitting on a foreign bed with not idea when I?m getting out
I?m sitting in a foreign room with the light of the television flickering blue
I?m sitting in a foreign place with my mind racing about you
I?m sitting in a foreign state of mind that I haven?t been to in a long time
I?m sitting here and my own self feels foreign
#2
its quite gd.. started off strong as you are setting the tone of the song with your 1st line.. but the lines in each verse is irregular so i am not sure whether it will flow well.. i am also not too sure about your last verse man, i wanted it to have a strong ending but it kinda fell short... all in all a fair effort i guess.. =]
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"Come over to my place, no ones home"


I went, there was no one home.


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