#1
This is my first song in a long time. Keep in mind that this is sparsely edited and I realize it's kind of cliche. Let me know what you think of it.

Two AM, I'm not getting tired
Two AM, I'm not getting bored
I lost the feeling now I'm getting lonely
Any longer and I'm going toward the edge
Early morning and all is quiet
Early morning and all is calm
Two AM darkness is going to find you
It's cold outside waiting for the dawn to come

Oh, everything's turning cloudy now
Oh, I wish for the sun to rise up soon
All I'll do is sit in the dark and
Wait... For two AM

In the darkness I feel a shaking
In the darkness I feel alone
Save myself, what can I do now?
Two AM and I can't go home at all

Oh, everything's turning cloudy now
Oh, I wish for the sun to rise up soon
All I'll do is sit in the dark and
Wait... For two AM

The walls around me are pulling in now
The walls around me sway in the breeze
Where's the sun? Now the cold is biting
I wish the darkness would just leave me be
The sun will come up now any minute
I can see myself coming home
Four AM and the moon is setting
Five AM now the moon is gone
And now I feel that the sun is rising
And two AM is now long gone
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#2
Any longer and I'm going toward the edge

Remove that line, I like the rest, very relaxing.

The walls around me are pulling in now
Cliche to the max. I think you may have something, just need make some changes
#3
Just a tad bit, and when I say a tad, just the SMALLEST bit of a pull away from the wall line... cuz other than that, I love it, and to say less than that would make me a liar....

Also, I do like the freedom of the lyrics, it's very interesting and original...
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#4
Two AM, I'm not getting tired
Two AM, I'm not getting bored
I lost the feeling now I'm getting lonely
Any longer and I'm going toward the edge
Early morning and all is quiet
Early morning and all is calm
Two AM darkness is going to find you
It's cold outside waiting for the dawn to come

This kind of sounds like you all gave the whole song away in the first stanza. Do you know what I mean. This could be a good chorus for the song if you ask me though. Just not a great opener.

Oh, everything's turning cloudy now
Oh, I wish for the sun to rise up soon
All I'll do is sit in the dark and
Wait... For two AM

I do not get this part. In this stazna 2 am sounds like the Protagonist when in the others it sounds like the antagonist. Maybe thats just me.

In the darkness I feel a shaking
In the darkness I feel alone
Save myself, what can I do now?
Two AM and I can't go home at all

Change the last line to end with "home" some how. Ending it with all seems awkward. This is pretty good.

Oh, everything's turning cloudy now
Oh, I wish for the sun to rise up soon
All I'll do is sit in the dark and
Wait... For two AM

ummm. I kind of see wher you are getting at. But the last line just is not working for me.

The walls around me are pulling in now
The walls around me sway in the breeze
Where's the sun? Now the cold is biting
I wish the darkness would just leave me be
The sun will come up now any minute
I can see myself coming home
Four AM and the moon is setting
Five AM now the moon is gone
And now I feel that the sun is rising
And two AM is now long gone

The walls,ahhh the walls. One of the most cliche sayings ever. Just get rid of that. but I did like the very end of it. Sounds kind of relaxing. I like that.


Overall i thought it was okay. I liked the end the most part just try to rewrite it and not use the cliche walls line. Good luck.