#1
FINISHED or close enough
Lets Dance on the Inside

(chorus)
Every body dance inside
you tried to decieve
you wouldn't believe
all the emotions i hide
You've broken my heart
you tore it apart
(but)
ill always stick by your side

(verse1)
Ill never forget what we did
under the covers in your bed
for you my heart bled
but you left me for dead
you went for him instead

(verse2)
Ill never forget what we had
whyd you go and tear it to shreds
im so sorry but im just fed
up and thats the last thing she said
her voice keeps echoing in my head

verse1
chorus
verse2
chorus
verse1
chorus.
Last edited by stratkat at Jun 17, 2006,
#5
Quote by b.c.rich rules
thats like the same thing as MCR, its all emo.

MCR IS NOT EMO IN MY OPINION I THINK THEY JUST PLAIN ROCK BUT I DO HATE ****IN HAWTHORNE HIEGHTS AND ESPECIALLY FALLOUT BOY
#7
MCR are awesome, not emo, FALL OUT BOY are awesome, not emo, so shut the flee up!

Okie, this is very very good so far. Obviously it does need the addition of more lyrics, and ide start another verse with something like
"Ill never forget what we had" etc...so its carrying on the theme of the other verse but also changing it. [if u PM me, we could probs work something out if you want]
Get what i mean?
But this is great so far, id like to see the finished version.

franz xxxxx
Quote by calvinthecanadi
I'm now an official Franzaholic.


Meep is a word.
Use it.
#9
I agree with franz, it needs a bridge or something instead of repeating the first verse, or even in addition to repeating the verse. Between the second verse and the second first verse (wow that sounds funky) add something like "what you did / tore me apart / i thought you loved me / from the start" or something like that kinda yelled with some heavy bass and rhythm guitar. A breakdown of sorts.

Just an idea.
#10
wow if you think hawthorne hights is emo but MCR isnt, your a little confused