#1
First Song (style:Think Atreyu)

Intro

Burn
These Wings Torn And Tattered.
Immolation.
Belive Me, I Tried! I Tried So Damn Hard.
Will I Burn? For My Sins? Mabye.

(Chorus)
Remember All The Times We've had.
When They Laughed I fought.
They should've thought twice before crossing Our Path.

Verse

I feel the Blood under my Fingernails.
Callosed, My heart and Your To blame.
Do you know what you did?.
Do you think you did Right?.
I KNOW you will Burn.
At least i know Why.
(chorus)

(Bridge--Whisper)
Hush Now Dont Make a Sound.(2x)
Your Soul Yet to be found.
You've Turned You Back too many times now.

(outro)
Me And You.
Hand.In.Hand.
We Can Burn Together.
Immolation.
(Chorus)


First Song I know i have alot of work to do but here it is any and all Crit will do
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Last edited by >Killed Ransom< at Jun 16, 2006,
#3
I like it alot. The best parts were the bridge and the outro. Once again you've written an awesome song. 10/10
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