#1
Hey out there! Well, when you read this text could you give me advices about things you would change, or just say if this text is good / bad. Thank you

Stranger

Verse1)

Catch the waiting failure
No one knows how sad I am
Look in the mirror from the inside
To get the feeling of getting damned

Chorus)

I'm the stranger
I'm the one who isn'T there
I'll disappear if you come to me
And I'll fade if you die

Verse 2)

Someone prays to his god
I'm waiting for salvation
I won't pull any trigger
But it's like something never ends

To waste the time I've saved
Everythings gone so fast I couldn't react
But I won't change my life now
I got no time to love you

What I used to be isn't anymore
What I'm now won't come again
All I want is happiness
To save my love to you

Chorus)

I'm the stranger
I'm the one who isn't there
I'll disappear if you come to me
and I'll fade if you die

if you die.....if you die ......if you die...........

Well that's it!! So please give me a reply on this song!!
#2
it's cool mate, u, I like this line the best:

To waste the time I've saved
Everythings gone so fast I couldn't react
But I won't change my life now
I got no time to love you

the only thing to fix is that it would be a letdown if the music sucked cuaz the lyrics need some powerful backing man! Great job!
#4
I liked it. I think the verses were better written than the chorus, but the chorus is still good. But overall, I think it had more stand-out lines than anything else. In other words, the lyrics don't seem like anything special until you reach a line like: "I got no time to love you". And that can be a good thing or a bad thing, depend upon the reaction you want from your audience.