#1
Ok, before I get some criticisms, I am fully aware that the rhyming is simple and that I rhyme the same words with each other. Rhyming wasn't really what I was focusing on. I went ahead and left the choruses in each time they are sung, so it might seem a little repetitive. Sorry about that. I also wish I had an audio track for this because the drums and guitar riff make the song, really. But tell me what you think. I'll probably wind up changing the title, by the way.
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I will never love again
I wish I could just pretend
I don?t have another friend
I wish it would all just end
All those times I talked to you
Everything I said was true
I just want to be with you
Forever in love with you
There is nothing left to say
Everything is A.O.K.

Hey?
Don?t go
Don?t go
Hey?
Don?t go
Don?t go

I have nothing left to lose
You won?t ever have to choose
I don?t want to damage you
I just want to be with you
Please give me another day
I cannot go on this way
I just wish that you could stay
Maybe just for one more day
I hate our happy memories
Please don?t fall away from me

Hey?
Don?t go
Don?t go
Hey?
Don?t go
Don?t go

Hey? Hey...
Don?t go
Don?t go

Letters that broke into you
I want nothing but the truth

Hey... Hey...
Hey... Hey...
Don't go
Don't go
Don't go
Don't go
#2
you're right, it's pretty repetitive. it's decent, and with the right music could sound really good. 7.5/10.
B.C. RICH