#1
ok this song is about a crush i have one a girl but i am way to scaired to ask her out so i wrote a song, so enjoy!!!!

Crusher

Flip 42

(verse1)
evry time i am around you
i don't now what to do
I have a sick and scaired feeling
When evertime i am around you
please take me and free me from this magic

(chorse)
love is burning inside me
Like a flame that flickers through the day and night
But you feel nothing for me
But why should i try now
nothing else really matters but only you
i will never feel the same way for anyone by the same way i feel for you
But there is nothing i can do but watch you slip by

(verse2)
sweat is running down my face
and my palms are soked
and my head is spinning
i close my eyes and feel myself falling down unto earth
and only then will i wake up
From this dream that is holding me imprisoned

(chorse)
love is burning inside of me
like a flame that flickers through the night
but you fell nothing for me
But why Should i try
nothing else really matters but only you
i will never feel the same why for any one by the way i feel for you
but there is nothing i can do but watch it slip by

(verse3)
after i woke up
i saw your face
and then that old fermiler feeling
started burning brighter and brighter in me
and i started to notice that i was falling back into my dream again

(Chorse)
love is burning through me
like a flame that flickers through the day and night
but you feel nothing for me
but why should i try
nothing else really matters but only you
i will never feel the same way for anyone by the way i feel for you
but there is nothing i can do but watch it all slip away


you will undersand what i am trying to say when you think about you chrush or your girlfriend while reading this please tell me what you think and i hope you liked it
"It is better to burn out then to fade away"-Kurt Cobain

"Keep you friends close, but your enemies closer"-The GodFather Part III

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#2
this is a very 'used' subject in songs, but i guess coz its realistic & true in your situation you can get away with it. youve spelt a few words wrong (so did i actually) which can be distracting when your reading it, & you can lose interest in the text. I'm not sure if this is a rhyming song, as sometimes it rhymes then others it doesnt so i honestly have no idea here. this might be something to work on, but good on you for posting it... well good luck anyway.
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I never understood why a girl would take a boner as a bad thing "Oh no, your attracted to me, you sick wanker." :\ x


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Im saying this the straightest way possible, but...

I'd have sexual intercourse with your anus.
#3
lets just say dont quit the day job

im tired, cranky and at work, which only adds to the crankiness. so i dont have time to go through everything thats wrong with this. maybe later ill come back and do it.
#4
ok thanks nickelbitch what are some suggestions you want to suggest to me about the lyrics? i Mean What would you idea to make this song into a rhythem song? And i thank you for your time to give me hints, suggestion, and pointing out this lyrical mistakes and i will look back over it to

Rock_god1023
"It is better to burn out then to fade away"-Kurt Cobain

"Keep you friends close, but your enemies closer"-The GodFather Part III

? W T F ?
(\__/)
(='.'=)
(")_(")

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