please crit.

I am in a tangled web of thorns; a maze with no exit
My heart is punctured by my own mistakes
Lost, in an interlacing network of thoughts

If fate is pre-determined, am i destined to this place?
Perhaps i have dreams, ambitions, desires
Restricted and fenced by someone elses case

Hold me close and tell me you're mine tonight
I will write a new outcome for you and I
Whisper the words and the rivers will groan
A dove, on an olive branch, in the light.
aint no angel gonna great me?
Last edited by guitarzak at Jun 19, 2006,
Sounds pretty good... for what type of music is it written (what genre)??
none at the moment. Will write music at some point. Thanks for the reply
aint no angel gonna great me?