#1
okay this is a song i wrote not too long ago, its not one of my best but i just decided to put t up and see the reaction ... im open to critisicm and suggestions, or even compliments should any of you decide to be kind enohg to a young fool !

( i will write the song in order as it is emant to be sung )

dear father up above,
im asking becauase i've had enough.
hello my freind down below,
how much time before i go ?

what is it inside of me,
is it real,
why cant i see ?
why am i blind ?
was i unkind ?
it feels unreal,
its a dream to steal

i ask the girl who can see in me
what ails you i cannot see
your promblem isnt real,
nor is it not there
its a burden you will have to bare

dear father up above,
im asking becauase i've had enough.
hello my freind down below,
how much time before i go ?

what is it inside of me,
is it real,
why cant i see ?
why am i blind ?
was i unkind ?
it feels unreal,
its a dream to steal

i ask the boy who knows all
he replies standing tall
it makes you seem weak,
or the stringest man alive
go forth and strive

dear father up above,
im asking becauase i've had enough.
hello my freind down below,
how much time before i go ?

what is it inside of me,
is it real,
why cant i see ?
why am i blind ?
was i unkind ?
it feels unreal,
its a dream to steal
#2
Kind of reminds me of S.O.A.D's Chop Suey, not just coz of that dear father line, but the whole idea of the song, but it's packed with originallity and i like it. Please crit my song 'everyone has a story to tell'