#1
The September 11 tragedy inspired me to write this song. I wrote it for all the people who lost their loved ones and for the heroes who risked their lives to save others. I know I'm not a really good songwriter and I know this song may still need reworking but I'm gonna post my song anyway so I get to know what you think. Thanks a lot....


Heaven's burning now upon us
All the tears that fell onto us
Their hopes and dreams just shattered
Heroes we'll always remember
Thousands died in vain
No one in this world
Could take away the pain

Save us
Save us from heaven falling down
Save us
Save us from our world going down
Save us
Please save us now

Heaven's burning now upon us
All we could ever do was
Watch as the world crumbled down before us
Life will never be the same
All we see are the ashes that remain

Save us
Save us from heaven falling down
Save us
Save us from our world going down
Save us
Please save us now
Last edited by No_Tomorrow at Jun 23, 2006,
#3
its not bad , try to bring in some more metaphors and comparisons

and big words, cuz that helps too

keep working on it i think itl be good