#1
This is my new song. Its not perfect but I thought I would send it anyway. So here it is.
Sometimes I feel
Like I dont have a partner
Sometimes I feel
Like my only friend
Is the city I live in
The city of angels
Lonely as I am
Together we cry

I drive on her streets
cause shes my companion
I walk through her hills
cause she knows who I am
She sees my good deeds
And she kisses me windy
I never worry
Now that is a lie

I dont ever want to feel
Like I did that day
Take me to the place I love
Take me all the way

Its hard to believe
That theres nobody out there
Its hard to believe
That Im all alone
At least I have her love
The city she loves me
Lonely as I am
Together we cry

I dont ever want to feel
Like I did that day
Take me to the place I love
Take me all the way

Under the bridge downtown
Is where I drew some blood
Under the bridge downtown
I could not get enough
Under the bridge downtown
Forgot about my love
Under the bridge downtown
I gave my life away

Please reply. Crit 4 crit.
#2
It's a little over repetitive.

It didnt really draw me in.

Its okay, but not great.
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#3
Get lost, you thieving idiot. Delete this and run before everyone hunts you down. No one steals AK's own touching lyrics. GET OUT OF HERE!!
#7
What are you talking about!?! I wrote this about when I was getting bullied at school and I felt like I had no friends. How dare you say that I have stolen it! This is a testimony to one of the hardest times of my life!
#8
Are you retarded or just dumb?

How about we critique you for your pure stupidity for stealing a song? Foolish mortal...
*tsk tsk tsk*
Crit 4 Crit:
Melodic Death--Broken Mortal
Melodic Death--Lost in the Wind
Thrash--Inner Demons

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the sad thing is not only is this guy a dumbass, but he is going to get more replies than i ever have, but thats is funny too
#9
the sad thing is not only is this guy a dumbass, but he is going to get more replies than i ever have, but thats is funny too
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#10
Quote by societies_worm
the sad thing is not only is this guy a dumbass, but he is going to get more replies than i ever have, but thats is funny too


Haha, sucks don't it? I'm in that same boat. Ohh yeah, you got sigged...
Crit 4 Crit:
Melodic Death--Broken Mortal
Melodic Death--Lost in the Wind
Thrash--Inner Demons

Quote by societies_worm
the sad thing is not only is this guy a dumbass, but he is going to get more replies than i ever have, but thats is funny too