#1
Itching eyes and I?ve found some half hearted surge of emotion.
It?s a paradise of love/ hate songs of devotion.
You know I?d like to take a quiet, easy life: a hazy, lazy life,
But sweetheart, something isn?t right.

It?s nothing I hadn?t thought of before.
Standing half naked on a chair with a belt around my neck.
It?s funny how we all love to turn into clichés in the end.
You know, Sweetheart, something isn?t right.

?Cos you?d bottle it, if you were me. I feel better for saying so.
Christ knows I did. There?s always something to live for.
Maybe I could turn to drinking, it might change something.
But sweetheart, something isn?t right.

So it?s where you end up that shows where you?ve been.
Everything?s simply honestly obvious, shimmering clean.
Like scrubbed worktops and the cool metal of the kitchen sink.
Sweetheart, something isn?t right.

Haven't written for ages due to lack of inspiration. Maybe the floodgates will open now.
"You can never quarantine the past."
#2
"to turn into" change to become?

"So it?s where you end up that shows where you?ve been." - Brilliant

sounds great, very poetic, nice similies

broken_bottles: let the floodgates open
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2005 Schechter C-1 Blackjack
'62 Fender Twin Reverb
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#3
Cheers. I see what you mean with 'turn into' and 'become'. The reason I used 'turn into' is because 'turn into' sounds more forced, I suppose that was the effect I wanted, I don't know. Ta anyway, if you've got a song knocking about I'll have a look.
"You can never quarantine the past."
#4
Im terrible at lyrics (writing them at least) i dont really write songs. I come up with them while playing and commit them to memory. I love critiquing though.

Yea, word of advice: like with the "turn into" and "become" i learned in a writing class that its best if you try to shorten a phrase of words into one word.

When I get some lyrics together...ill post em
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2003 American Fender Stratocaster
2005 Schechter C-1 Blackjack
'62 Fender Twin Reverb
Marshall JCM800
2002 Fender Fretless Jazzbass
CryBaby Wah
Line 6 POD XT Live

"My student SLEPT with your honor student"