#1
Ok, for all you people out there who are saying, "Hey he already posted this song on the Original Recordings", I know I did that, but now I'm redoing the song and I just want to know if the lyrics are alright. They're simple lyrics, and the song is just about summer fun and love so here it is...(Crit for Crit of course)

Inch by inch
That's how we take it
Or dive right in
Or dive right in

Golden skin
Flowing hair
Stay out 'til ten
Or 'til who knows when

Put the car in drive
Hand in hand
We'll stay out all night
Stay out all night

And now it's getting
Hard to breath
Hard to move
Hard to see
And this I love you for
And this I love you for

Grab a coffee
Talk too much
And then we leave
And then we leave

Take you home
You are tired
Lights go on
Shining like the sun

I stop the car
Just to think of you
We're too far apart
Too far apart

And now it's getting
Hard to breath
Hard to move
Hard to see
And this I love you for
And this I love you for

Inch by inch
That's how we take it
Or dive right in
Or dive right in
#2
I actually liked this. It is simple, but in a way, it works. It almost reminded me of "Jack and Dianne," by John Mellencamp. I'm not sure why lol. Good job. It reminds you of good times, but also explores the emotions brought upon us during lonliness. I like it.

Could you rate mine too? It's called Take Me Away.