#1
Hey this is my first song, its got a bit of meaning behind it to me. Tell me what you think, and be harsh if need be, and if you could give me idea of bits that I could change that woudl be awesome.

"Turn Away"

Verse 1:

So here we are,
As close as we'll ever be.
We come to this, we fall apart
We're falling through the sky,
No one here to catch us;
I can see it, we're gunna die...

Pre Chorus:

Why did it have to turn like this,
Why did it go this way,
Why did it have to turn like this,
Why did you run away?...

Chorus:

Turn away now, turn away and be gone,
Turn away now, your not wanted any more...

Turn away now, turn away and be gone,
Turn away now, your not wanted any more...

Verse 2:

You say after time, we will be be together, again,
But look at what we have become...
We are nothing, there is nothing left; for anyone;
So as this night comes to a close, remember what I said;
I can see it, we're gunna die...


Pre Chorus
Chorus
Interlude/Outro:

Turn away, ohhh ahhh etc etc...

Cheers!
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Last edited by lespaulmarshall at Jun 26, 2006,
#2
interesting. seems like a radio song really. no use of metaphors or devices. but still catchy. RECORD IT SOON!!
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#3
Well I have made a few changes to the lyrics, because they sounded corny as **** and were too lovely dovey.

And by the way the music is incubusy, sorta like 'I wish you were here' kinda thing. Comment are really greatly appreaciated

Peace
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LesPaulMarshalls ace!
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LesPaulMarshall, you friggin rock!
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It's pretty hard to find someone as hardcore as Tom. The race for hardcore supremacy would be pretty close but i think Tom's got his nose just in front for now...