#1
This is the first two verses... it's a really personal song and I want to record the whole thing at some point, but my computer's been weird recently.

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#2
Hmm... dude u can sing. it sounds like a very casual recording..... so i wont point out that the guitar kinda sounds off in some places.... or the keyboard strokes :P. But as far as the songwriting goes. I like it a lot. A LOT. The songwritings very cool. the melody is very catchy.

coupled with ur voice and this songwriting. U can make pretty good songs. Just be more serious about it But who am i to say that lol. i get bored of songs after 2-3 verses hahaha .

Anyways. if u could crit mine in return id be greatfull.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=382085
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