#1
This is the story, I was cleaning out my folders on my computer and I came across this. Well just the music for it, and I can remember recording about 4-5 months ago, but I can 't really remember how to play it. But I thought it was a cool little piece, and recently i have been writing a poem, so I figured to put the words for that poem over this song because i thought they went well. and the chorus was made up on the spot, though the vox arent good at all, it was still fun recording this, hope you listen, leave any feedback if you want, thanks in advanced. Crit 4 Crit.

link in sig
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Last edited by societies_worm at Jun 26, 2006,
#3
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That's the name of a nirvana song...



is it? damnit, i really dont listen to nirvana that much, but damn i feel like an idiot now, i guess i can change the title to "We All Have to Fly Someday" but damn Nirvana, I liked Aero-Zeppelin as a title, sorry.
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#4
intros good. sounds like the vocals and guitar arent on the same note when they sync.

guitar sounds out of tune tbh.

later on the vocals and guitar matchs up better when they sync. needs some more multitracking, mixing and backing instruments tbh. it seems a little bland. the playing itself is spot on though good job!! it just would sound better if you employed better mixing. nice effects too.

hope my rambles were of use to you.

edit: mines up now https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=383598

thx
#5
Quote by NeptuneUK
intros good. sounds like the vocals and guitar arent on the same note when they sync.

guitar sounds out of tune tbh.

later on the vocals and guitar matchs up better when they sync. needs some more multitracking, mixing and backing instruments tbh. it seems a little bland. the playing itself is spot on though good job!! it just would sound better if you employed better mixing. nice effects too.

hope my rambles were of use to you.

edit: mines up now https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=383598

thx


hey man thanks for the listen, yea i would add more instruments and stuff, but i just can remember what i played, or what i was playing at that time, wish i had some type of drums too, but thanks for the listen and i got to yours as well.
anybody wanna put anything here just let me know
#6
Guitar sounds awesome - good use of the wah. I like the combination of chords leading into single notes that go along with the vocals (which could be turned up a little). The solo had some really good moments, and some shaky ones. The vocal effects were pretty cool and definitely added to the song.

Crit mine (Wanted to Say)? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=383052
#7
hey, ilike your playing, very unique guitar playing in this. only downside i think is the mixing, maybe higher the vox?
and as the others have said, this would sound great with some drums
#8
I think the guitaring is pretty good. and the concept and the way u presented is excellent. I enjoyed it a lot. The vocals could use some work. Maybe its the mixing or something.. but the vocals dont sound in sync like NeptuneUK mentioned. The solo has a few defining momments. I like the effects cos they create the atmosphere. a few drums and ur set.


Edit: Crit Mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=382085
...i hate shakus-spear ....
#9
Its not bad dude, but the guitar and vox dont seem to be matching up notewise. it sounds like your singing off key. also, at points it seems off beat a little bit but that may just be. also, try raising the volume for the lead during the solo, maybe raise it just a tad. but other than that its pretty good.
keep on rockin,
thanks for the crit
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