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ok, before you say that my song i too sad or emo, first, hear me out. I wrote it when I was upset about my great-grandfather died, and I was beggining to miss him.

Don't Leave Me


I didn't want to say goodbye, as I stood by your side, and i cried into the night, don't leave me:|

Hold me close to you, don't tear my heart into two, what ever youdo don't let go of me, can you hear me, scream out yourname, can you see me, cry away my pain, don't walk away, don't walk away.

i didn't want to let go of the arms that held me close, in my arms you'll forever be, don't leave me.

hold me close to you, don't tear my heart into two, whatever you do...

he said, I'll always be with you, in my heart youalways be, and don't forget, don't leave...

hold me close to you, don't tear my heart into two, whatever you do don't ever forget me.........
#2
nicely written, maybe easier to read in verse form, but it flowed nicely, some of the rhymes seemed a little forced, but the emotion makes up for it.

Could you check ut mine? As Pictures Fade Away, the links in the sig if you have time.

thx, and good job