#1
This is the second song I've posted on these forums. I just wrote this down whilst in my Physics class earlier. I might put this forward to my band if you guys think it's good enough. I just don't think it has the same rythm. Any comments would be helpful.

I guess you're right
I guess you're right
I guess you're right
I guess you're right
But why does it feel so wrong,

Get outta my head,
Get outta my bed,
No matter what you said,
Like I should give a damn,
About you,
But I do,

Move left, move right,
Just sit the **** tight,
I'll be here but not for you,

My love,

Woah,
Get Out,
Get Out,
Get Out,
Get Out girl,
I'm just sick of bein' caught up in the whirl,
Scream for me, you know I'd do the same for you,
You stupid little girl,
Lets go out for a while,

Move left, move right
Just sit the **** tight,
An everything will be alright,

My love,
My love,

I guess you're right,
I guess you're right,
I guess you're right,
Just hold on tight,

I'll take you left,
Skip you to the right,
If you hold on tight,
We'll both be all right,

Ill throw you down,
And pick you back up,
If we hold on tight,
Everything will be alright,

Alright.......
Alright.......
Alright.......

1, 2, 3, 4,

Lets just hold on tight,
I'm sure I was wrong,
Coz I feel alright,
As long as I've got my...

Hold on tight,
Get ready to let loose,
We're on a spinning ride,
And we ain't gettin off now...
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#2
Hmmm...the idea is a little cliche, but for the actual song...
The rhyming sounded a little forced, and I've heard some of the lines a few too many times. The flow of the song suffers because several verses don't fit in the rhythm, I think you know which ones. The thing has a great beat to it where it doesn't leave the classic rhythm. The "my love, my love" parts were a little blnad, but they work.
8.5/10

If you could, can you check out mine? the links in my sig, just click on As Pictures Fade Away.
I 'd ask you to crit Where Are You, but I don't want to seem like a selfish prick, lol.

Anyway, good job in general, even if you did use a fairly cliche topic
#3
lol cheers i know i am so cliche. I just scrawled this down out of boredom. Time to repay the favour now. Keep comments comin
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#4
you know what it really reminds me of?
Nirvana's song hehe tell me it's a grunge sonG and I'll tell you it's perfect :P
#5
its a grunge song...............lol
all my songs are written then ill shove a genre to it :p thx tho spurs me on!
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