#1
sorry about the title... i dont really like it... and i wana change it... im just going to leave like that though until i think of a better title... anyway... i dont know what i was thinking when i wrote this... its kind of random i guess... i dont know though... anyways crit for crit... so give me some constructive critisism please and thanks.


Her head was an atomic bomb
Strike-anywhere matches in her eyes
She took the easy way out
I took the easy way in
Her smile cramping my deceit
It was too easy to see but too hard to notice
That she wasn?t here
The day I came home
She was lying in bed
In her casket nailed to a crucifix
Burying the moon in cocaine

That?s when it struck me
A bolt of lightning
Like a tattoo in the sky
Like the water in God?s eyes
The knot in his beard gives the weak ones
A reason to live
She told me she would be fine
She was going to a better place
Then stigmata hit me like a brass knuckle
Clearing the way
Of maggots feeding on her heart

It seemed like suicide
Was the only way out
Her sweat was always made of blood
Until the day she left this earth
All my sins were absolved
When bullets climbed down her throat
Like music to my tears
She always hated everything

I don?t think I tried hard enough
To satisfy
She rode the elevator home
I took the key to her mind
Her headache exploded in my hands
She?s not alone
We?re not alone

It seemed like suicide
Was the only way out
Her sweat was always made of blood
Until the day she left this earth
All my sins were absolved
When bullets climbed down her throat
Like music to my tears
She always hated everything

I don?t think I tried hard enough
To satisfy
She rode the elevator home
I took the key to her mind
Her headache exploded in my hands
She?s not alone
We?re not alone

We?re not alone

We?re not alone
That Cheap Fucking Smile Carries You To Bed

Those Lips Are Social Suicide But I Just Wanna See You Dead.
Last edited by dethskar0 at Jun 28, 2006,
#2
these are quite brilliant lyrics although like you've said a new title is needed, might i suggest
"Suicide was the only way out" or "Like Music to My Tears"
#3
thank you. i don't usually name songs after a line in them though. however, i will think about it this time. thanks. anyone else?
That Cheap Fucking Smile Carries You To Bed

Those Lips Are Social Suicide But I Just Wanna See You Dead.
#4
I can't entirely explain how I thought about this name suggestion but anything would be better than nothing, right?

As the Flame Flickers and Dies

I get this volatile image from the song, and it reminded me of the way a candle flashes violently before it abruptly blows out sometimes...

I tell ya what, this is powerful. It hurts me in the way a song like this should hurt... you did a great job.
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