#1
The falsehoods of today
Are the same as tomorrows
Nothing will change
Stop playing blind

The smiles
The lies
The treaties
The sh*t every f*cking person buys

They don?t mean it
Why do you believe it?
Do you sleep better at night?
Yet, you know it?s not alright

They?re cold to your pleas
Reality is fiction
Escape while you have the chance
To a place far from here

Take that step
Off that cliff
There?s no going back
Welcome to nowhere
#2
Great song, it seems really dark... I like how you wrote it.

c4c?
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#3
Is this a punk song? Not suggesting anything, just seems like it could be one. All questions aside, this is a great song. It's provocative, and makes the reader(/listener) think. I also like how the song builds to the last verse, and it ends with the title "Welcome to nowhere", it works well. 8 out of 10, keep it up!
And if you get the time, could you crit my song please? "Too Late To Say" - the link is in my sig.
Thanks
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#4
very interesting set of lyrics IMO, but the way you've expressed them seems very blunt and forced. i think it is a great basis, but requires work.
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#6
I'm assuming I'm doing fairly well since this is the 3rd song I've ever written...
It could be punk, I listen to lots of punk so I probably get a ton of influence from there.
Thanks for the advice.
#7
I think its a great, dark song.

I would change:
Take that step
Off that cliff
There?s no going back
Welcome to nowhere


to:
Take that step
Off that cliff
There?s no going back
When you're going nowhere

or:
Take that step
Off that cliff
You can't go back
Welcome to nowhere