#1
A little poem I wrote.
Starts out great if I say so myself but because everything except the first stanza is kind of forced it gets a bit generic towards the end.
Ah well...here's teh poem:

My feelings for you

Daydreams of golden radiance
fill my heart when I'm with you

All I see is your pure beauty
which is enough to blind me

Nothing in the world makes me feel so good
like your presence when you're near

Nothing in the world can scare me
when you're here by my side

I don't know to say this but
I think I fancy you
On the sixth day God created mankind, I say it is a waste of time.
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#2
I don't know to say this but
I think I fancy you



!!!

*reads again*



It started off not bad.... but that killed it for me.
#3
That end did destroy it. Other than that it was pretty solid, the wording seemed a bit awkward though.
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