#1
Kill me again

I am, anything but here, erased from the face of reality
A black hole inside. consumes all the light. supposed to exist?.
I shield my face, drive indiscretion, Through my heart?.
I cant feel you, quivering and, numb?..
Lying?
waiting for hope to find me,
love to resurrect me,
but ?til then, I don?t care

Go on
Shoot me again
You can?t
Cause I?m already dead
**** with
My ****ing head
I won?t
Feel you, anything, anymore

I search, quietly through my shame, finding nothing at all
But your face, and all my pain, I don?t care
As I stare blank, my heart turns to ash, face to stone
I am nothing, and its your fault, **** you
Listening
I heard everything
every knife you drive
in my back, I don?t care

bring out your weapons,
antagonizing lies,
they?ll backfire off,
what?s dead to you

Go on
Shoot me again
You can?t
Cause I?m already dead
**** with
My ****ing head
I won?t
Feel you, anything, anymore (X2)

(solo)

bring out your weapons,
antagonizing lies,
they?ll backfire off,
what?s dead to you


Go on
Shoot me again
You can?t
Cause I?m already dead
**** with
My ****ing head
I won?t
Feel you, anything, anymore

Have another ****ing stab
It wont hurt
Im already ****ing dead
To you. (X2)
#2
Man that's the best composed song I've ever seen posted, although I'm a newbie. Not much for the mood of the song, but it's a breathe of fresh air from "your heart is like a flower, with love i shall shower." I like it because you realize every line doesn't have to rhyme.
#3
Ehh.. Not so much to me. Sounds like the bastard child of Children Of Bodom and any Emo band. There were a couple spots with intelligent lyrics though. It's just not a song that's breaking any ground, it's just the sanme, "My girlfriend broke up with me so now I hate her."
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#4
^Granted, it's your standard emo dirge, but it's actually pretty well-written. I like the chorus.
According to BS statistics, 92% of teens have moved on to rap. If you're among the 8% who doesn't consider rap to be real music, donate your brains, as you clearly aren't using them.
#5
thanks guys, i actually didnt write it about a girl who broke up with me :P But of course thats what it looks like cause thats what evry 2nd song on here is about. Its actually a little more complex than that, but make of it what you want.

Too much rhyme sounds cheesy imo, and too many complex metaphors and simlies sound stupid after a while too. Thanks again ppl.