#1
This is my first completed songwriting attempt and I'm looking for some feed back. tell me what you think

Surrounded by my fears
To know my self--to be obscure
To the table drops another tear
Becoming pure

August fades
September fades
But I'm still in June

Silence now my biggest friend
I'm still in June

You can find me in this place
Between broken dreams and shattered faith
Absent of a friendly face
About to break

August fades
September fades
But I'm still in June

Still in June
#2
Better luck next time.

And the whole thing with months and seasons in songs has to end. Everyone and their mother has a song about "winter is cold" and "December is fading" and "the months of change" and **** like that.
#3
I will admit that time messages in songs are getting boring (mostly made cliched by Greenday) but does that make the entire song unsalvageable?