#1
Right guys this is my first song so any helpful critisim is welcome and none of this u suck crap!
Cheers


Alright Tonight


1. Alright, Alright
Why wont things turn out all right
I no, I no
How I want things to turn out
They won?t, they won?t
Why wont they be alright tonight

Things are running through my head
Every where I turn, every where I tread
I need my guidance from a better place
To help me win my battles, to help me find my faith

2. Pressure from this outside world
This pressure is great, this pressure will tell
Every day a piece of me it slips away, away from my grasp
I?m fighting a war, a one-man war
This war is raging on for too long

Things are running through my head
Every where I turn, every where I tread
I need my guidance from a better place
To help me win my battles, to help me find my faith

3. For many months and many years
I?ve been searching alone, all alone
But now that I?ve found you
I now that things will be alright tonight

Things are running through my head
Every where I turn, every where I tread
I need my guidance from a better place
To help me win my battles, to help me find my faith
#2
I thought that there was gonna be a load of forced rhyming, but I was happily surprised I reckon that'd worked nicely as an acoustic piece, or a full blown electric thing with an orchestra.... flows nicely, stays rhythmic throughout.. good job for your first piece

crit 4 crit?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=385673