#1
79º

It's a Hot summer day
The same as the others
Your controlled enviornment
Protects you

What's that i taste,
It is the outside
the Outside
On a hot summer day


I live my life at 79º
it''s always shorts for me
Casual week at the job
Life is 79º there too

The point of the seasons
is rendered useless
We forget the weather
at 79º

What's that i taste,
It is the outside
the Outside
On a hot summer day


Crit for Crit
#3
I like it, to me it's sort of satirical about how we just adjust everything to suit us, regardless of the rest of the world, other species. How we as people forget that life isn't/shouldn't be about doing something we detest all the time (working and such). I'm guessing this is pretty much what you were going for.

At first I was like *lame*, but then aorund the fourth stanza/versy thing I was like, hmmm this is getting interesting. I do like it, and would be interested in hearing you put music to it if you play to. I almost feel like writing some music for it just to hear it, but I would much prefet to hear it how you indended. Thanks for the good read, and don't worry about critting back
To see a World in a Grain of Sand
And a Heaven in a Wild Flower
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour