#1
All You See

Slowly drifting in this unknown parallel

Wake up to familiar faces
Stuck in the same places
This must be a vague dream
Walls stained with my fear
I swear this day is the last time

This must be a faint illusion
Like a mirage dillusion
A flawed reality has taken life
The monster feeds on my mortality
I cant even remember
What came before all this

All You See is the same as yesterday
Living in a cycle that never ends
Pay the same price everyday
Somehow I must make amends

Slowly drifting intho this unknown parallel
Feeble attempts to hold on to everything i once knew

I don't want to live like this any longer
It's my time to ascend
Rise above the confinement
I'm coming home
To return to you
It feels like its been forever

All You See is the same as yesterday
Living in a cycle that never ends
Pay the same price everyday
Somehow I must make amends

I am free from the unknown parallel
and I am home with you
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint
Last edited by Rymaninthebox at Jul 3, 2006,
#2
well its pretty good, I could imagine it with a 6 minute kinda song thing, loaded with special effects like phaser, delay, reverb, flanger , wah , etc

kinda like a.... jimi hendrix... pink floyd.. steve vai thing you know ?

I dont really understand what you're talking about but thats the fun in it sometimes, cuz it forces us to really try to focus on what you're talking about, makes the listener think

( though i would like an explanation )
#3
Quote by Rising
well its pretty good, I could imagine it with a 6 minute kinda song thing, loaded with special effects like phaser, delay, reverb, flanger , wah , etc

kinda like a.... jimi hendrix... pink floyd.. steve vai thing you know ?

I dont really understand what you're talking about but thats the fun in it sometimes, cuz it forces us to really try to focus on what you're talking about, makes the listener think

( though i would like an explanation )


its about someone who lives in a "repeating cycle" so to speak. where the same things occur over and over again and its driving him crazy. it feels like he is slipping into a cycle where he has no control. the person struggles to be free from the cycle which is taking a toll on him.

and the references to home and returning to you is going back to he lifestyle where everyday wasnt the same and it was happier.
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint
#4
Quote by Rymaninthebox
its about someone who lives in a "repeating cycle" so to speak. where the same things occur over and over again and its driving him crazy. it feels like he is slipping into a cycle where he has no control. the person struggles to be free from the cycle which is taking a toll on him.

you mean like a day-to-day dead end kind of thing ?

like if a guy workin from 8 to 5 in some crappy cubicle boring job everyday and every aspect of his normal life is all repetitive ?

you make it seem alot more complicated than my idea for that

EDIT : good job though
#5
Quote by Rising
you mean like a day-to-day dead end kind of thing ?

like if a guy workin from 8 to 5 in some crappy cubicle boring job everyday and every aspect of his normal life is all repetitive ?

you make it seem alot more complicated than my idea for that

EDIT : good job though


haha yeah thats exactly what i mean
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint
#6
bump
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint
#7
it alway bugs me when there are 40-something views and only a few comments. does it take that long to type what you think?
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint
#8
I have to say I quite like this song it has a decent flow and very good theme that I can relate to. The only problem with this song is the ending:

I don't want to live like this any longer
It's my time to ascend
Rise above the confinement
I'm coming home
To return to you
It feels like its been forever

I am free from the unknown parallel
and I am home with you

I dosen't really make much sense, where are you going home to? It's just a huge cliché masking as a stanza. It dosen't flow very well either. Change that part completely, find a diffrent way to end the cycle. Also you might want to elaborate on the line Walls stained with my fear I don't understand it. would appreciate it if you could comment on my song.
#9
and the references to home and returning to you is going back to the lifestyle where everyday wasnt the same and it was happier and more satisfying.

but i can see how you people would get confused. ill have to fix that part up
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint
#10
bump
Room For Error

Shows
6.30.05: 3 Doors Down, Staind, Breaking Benjamin
9.22.05: Disturbed, Ill Nino, 10 Years
4.1.06: Sevendust, Nonpoint
10.2.06: Red Hot Chili Peppers, The Mars Volta
11.21.06: Disturbed, Stone Sour, Flyleaf, Nonpoint