#1
VERMIN

All your life you worn these scars
That run deeper than bulletholes and trackmarks
You tainted your soul and bloodied your hands
You got nothing left to lose and a gun in your hand
You hang with vermin you call friends
The same people who will leave you for dead
The path lies ahead of you but you lost your way
You stood on the edge and fell from grace

Do you realize
That when you die
You don't come back to life

Well I guess nothing tastes as sweet as revenge
But what do you do when they're all dead
I don't want to preach but I want you to know
There's only two places you are going to go
You'll be locked away in the penitentary
Or buried in some far off cemetery
I tried to help you but you couln't be saved
Last night I said a prayer over your grave

Do you realize
That when you die
You don't come back to life
#3
sounds almost cliche but not quite, ill give it a 7/10
I liked the first half better than the second
#5
I like these lyrics alot, even if it would be played to emo music..

There's only two places you are going to go
You'll be locked away in the penitentary
Or buried in some far off cemetery
I tried to help you but you couln't be saved
Last night I said a prayer over your grave

i like that part, i can picture it very well in my mind, crit mine? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=386958
#6
thanks for the crit on my song.
ok, this is good, but like other people have said it's a bit cliche. the second half of the song seems alot better than the first.overall, I'd give this a 7.5/10.
B.C. RICH