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Wekiva Springs

I snuck into Wekiva Springs
sometime between eleven and morning,
I stripped off my clothes
and dove head first into the water,
I thought I was daring,
I thought I was swimming,
as I hovered between the surface and spring
jealous of the stars shining above my head,
as they grimaced, watching me drowning complacently
with the biggest smile I could muster
when I couldn't breathe
one day closer
to life beginning.
Very good I like the imagery and style. It's too short though you need to say more about the subject. Please crit my song I'm desprate for comments.
Quote by BASStRon
are you emo?

Are you an ignoramus?

And for the record, no. I don't like emo music.

James Taylor FTW