#1
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new song i just wrote- it may seem like i shouldnt have changed lines- but im just lookin for hwo yall liek the words, the pattern fits the song extremely well

please give full crit- and if ya post a link to a song- i will crit as well


Long time ago

a Long time ago, when A blue sky wasn?t so rare
and a long time ago when hard work paid like it should
when the sun shinnin was just another day in the world....
And it was good

And I whish things could be like they used to,
when I was just a thought in young mans future
and green grass led way to the distance,
never from your grasp

and when a soldier was praised for what he did in war
or after
and the only thing that wasn?t sane was the dog that chased his own tail
and ruined the milk pail
* continued in next post*
Last edited by tongue untied at Jul 5, 2006,
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and we I dint have to worry bout the tear in your eye
or how stiff my drink was
and good times were simply ones, spent in each others presence
or embrace

And a long time ago- when I smile wasn?t that rare,
before the con man awoke from his bed
and a long time was spent just staring, for the sake of peace
in the air

and I whish it could have bin so easy for us to get along
and not go wrong
but its not a long time ago, its just yesterday
or tomorrow

And I whish things could be like they used to,
when I was just a thought in young mans future
and green grass led way to the distance,
never from your grasp

and when a soldier was praised for what he did in war
or after
and the only thing that wasn?t sane was the dog that chased his own tail
and ruined the milk pail