#1
Might still need finishing/work on it. It was one of the first songs i wrote.
Be honest on what u think of it



You, talked about leaving when you were here,
Then you dissapeard,
not tellin' me where your going,
or when you'll be back,
you left me sitting here, all alone,
with nothing to do,
and now all that I do is...,
I think about you.

The fun we had,
Is now all gone,
You left it all behind,
When you shatterd my life.

You left me sitting here, all alone,
with nothing to do,
and now all that I do is,
yes its all that i do...,
I think about you.

I think about when you were here,
lights down low,
havin' fun together,
but i didnt know,
that you were gunna take my heart,
rip it away,
and leave me here to rot in tears and, die.

You, talked about leaving when you were here,
Then you dissapeard,
not tellin' me where your going,
or when you'll be back,
you left me sitting here, all alone,
with nothing to do,
and now all that I do,
yes its all that i do,
i think....i think about you.
#3
I think its a pretty well written for your first song! Good effort, I got told my first song was remedial so I wouldn't worry, we all have to start somewhere.

I agree with sevendust though, I reckon if you picked a less cliched subject you could right some really good stuff
#4
Ya i just found this and i thought id post i wrote a few weeks after i turned 13. but thx for the crits