#1
this is just a song a wrote after listenin to a lot of lynyrd skynyrd. tell me what you think. i hope a few of you can relate to it lol. crit 4 crit. thanx

Well I only hurt the ones I love
Cos they?re the easiest to hurt
I wish I could be a better man
But lord knows I can?t turn
So I?ll continue what I?m doing
And never mean what I always say
As long as I don?t feel no pain
Well I?m happy with my ways

I only hurt the ones I love
Cos they?re the only ones hurting me
I only need the ones I drive away
But I know they?re driving free
And it?s numbing to pass on the pain
Though I guess it?s wrong to them
I?ll only hurt the ones that love me
Well I guess that I?ve made my bed

I?ve got to lie in this lonely bed
Listening to all your lies in my head
And your voice it hurts, but I guess you know
Oh lord, you got to let me baby let you go

Well I only love the ones I hurt
Atleast I hope I hurt them true
Though I guess I never meant that much
Atleast I know I didn?t to you
Now there?s another man within my place
I hope he?s keeping it warm for me
But somehow deep inside I doubt it
Cos little girl, you?re running free

Well I better learn to love the loneliness
Cos it?s my only company
It can?t sing a song or tell me when I?m wrong
But Atleast it stays with me
And I?ve made my bed with all the words I said
Now I guess I better sleep
But there?s no point opening my eyes
If you?re not lying next to me

I?ve got to lie in this lonely bed
Listening to all your lies in my head
And your voice it hurts, but I guess you know
Oh lord, you got to let me baby let you go

Why won?t you let me let you go?
Does it make you happy just to know?
That this broken man is yearning for you
Well it?s the end of my sympathy show...
Let me let you go


thanx agen. crit 4 crit
#4
Quote by 100%_of_nothing

Well I only love the ones I hurt
Atleast I hope I hurt them true


haha.
sometimes i feel the same way.
keep up the good work.
#5
cheers.

'sounds like something ronnie van zant would have written.' - a bit exaggerated but wow, thanx so much. does anyone have any suggestions of how i could improve it?
#6
Good rhyming, not too much of it. Good use of syllables in each line too. The feelings behind it are something you can write about easily. Hood on ya
Quote by guitar_man_guy
Funniest story ever.

So Im in my room with my girlfriend, and Im getting a blow job (It's like 11 at night, thought everyone was asleep) and my brother opens the door while saying "Duuude you wont believe what I just caught Mom and Dad doing!"