#1
Hey. This is a song written by me & my band, and I thought i should post it. And my friend typed it, and I didnt proofread it, so there might be mistakes.

I confess
I was wrong
So trueeeeeeeee
Your gone moved along
And everthing seemes so wrong to you
You're just taking all these chances
Girl I wnat to dance with
Lyin on my bed
Stuck with you in my head
I'm pretty much dead
(chorus)
I'm going crazy
And everthing's hazy
What happened to me
What did I used to be
I'm gonna lose
Can't I just move
Get out of my head
Get me outta my bed

Where'd you go
some thing i neede
to tell you
heart ache
it gonna break
you just seen me through
in love it seems
you in my dreams
my alarmn clock is ringin
and im going down singin
(chourus)
im going crazy
and everthings hazy
what happened to me
what did i used to be
im gonna lose
cant i just move
get out of my head
get me outa my bed

(slow)
and look at me
and lets look back at you
and after all this time
im still in love with you
(instrumental)

(chourus)
im going crazy
and everthings hazy
what happened to me
what did i used to be
im gonna lose
cant i just move
get out of my head
get me outa my bed
im going crazy
and everthings hazy
what happened to me
what did i used to be
im gonna lose
cant i just move
get out of my head
get me outa my bed
Last edited by Sum41Freek at Jul 6, 2006,
#2
I guess it could be catchy if you sang but, I think the concept is off. Why you just half to add dead because it ryhmes ?
#4
well i can deffintly see the blink influence there and the modern sum 41 it's like a mix with some more serious matter and some funni sexual content but thats just my opinion it's kinda long but i liked it all good job p.s. plz crit some of my work
#5
It's not what I'd usually enjoy, lyrics wise, but like the people before,I think it would be really catchy, just seems that type of song.

Not bad, not bad at all, I can't think of any suggestions though.
#6
It really depends on what kind of song you want to write.

If it were me, I'd change the "dead" rhyme to something else.

And in the chorus I would change "everythings hazy" to "It makes me feel so lazy."

Don't know what you'd wanna do, so I'll leave the corrections up to you.
#7
As others have said sounds like it could be a pop-punkish type song like blink or sum... just make a couple fixes- and well... since it is that type of song, it would be really catchy- probably a song you'd hear on the radio way too much... ha ha- well good job.

Crit my songs when you have the time =p