**A song i had been working on for a little while, i am mildly proud, but i feel theres something missing or sumthing that could be better, but i cnt find it so i need ur help to crit thnx alot**

The Black Path

Can. You. Feel.
No you can?t it?s black
Where will you go
If you can?t turn back
Step. By. Step.
Walk towards a dark gate
Just. One. Step.
And you?ve sealed your fate

(brige riff)

Satan will stalk
But only when you walk


Started walking on the black path
You will struggle you will feel the wrath
When you walk on the black path
You will hope but you Will. Not. Pass.
And when you walk on the black path
There is no turning back

Left. Right Left.
All alone in the dark
Fall from the weight of you sinful heart
Lost. And. Damned.
Walk the path and fall
Put your hands upon your ears
You will hear him call



You had your chances
Plenty for the taking
But u always turned away
You were always faking
So now you?re imprisoned
On a Dead. End. Path.
Oh how you wish you had your chances back


Say. Your. Prayers.
But they fall on deaf ears
Crawl on the path of your truest fears
See. The. Truth.
You brought yourself here
You turned away when hope was there
By. Your. Will
You walk further away
Sin after sin on the path you fade

awesome song dude
"The Day that I die is the day that I shut my mouth and put down my guitar" - Bradley Nowell of Sublime

R.I.P- 1996