#1
This is my first song that I've ever written and I'm 13 so give me some crits

Verse:
Been staring at the cieling for about an hour
I'm getting really tired and my eyes are getting sore
I always feel this way when she brings me down
This isn't any different it's just another go around

Chorus:
Time after time again
I find myself like this
Begging for one more chance
This is nothing new
And sometimes I wonder
Why do I even try
Cuz I know I'll never get it right

Verse:
Haven't been this depressed in awhile
For her I'd run a thousand miles
People tell me to get used to being
In my house theres no use for a ****ing phone

Chorusx2
Last edited by Blinkfanatic108 at Jul 6, 2006,
#2
Good song for your first.

I'm fourteen and I write pretty much the same way.

Just add another verse and your good.