This is my first song that I've ever written and I'm 13 so give me some crits

Been staring at the cieling for about an hour
I'm getting really tired and my eyes are getting sore
I always feel this way when she brings me down
This isn't any different it's just another go around

Time after time again
I find myself like this
Begging for one more chance
This is nothing new
And sometimes I wonder
Why do I even try
Cuz I know I'll never get it right

Haven't been this depressed in awhile
For her I'd run a thousand miles
People tell me to get used to being
In my house theres no use for a ****ing phone

Last edited by Blinkfanatic108 at Jul 6, 2006,
Good song for your first.

I'm fourteen and I write pretty much the same way.

Just add another verse and your good.