#1
Ok....Just to let you know, i wrote this song to make my friends laugh cuz our best friend (the girl's boyfriend) went to europe for a month and a half.

Joke song.

I have this friend
Went away for a week
Some guy liked his girl
I smelled him, he reeked
He went straight for the girl
I told my friend
And he went insane

He beat his ass
Cause the girl didn?t like it
He beat his ass
Cause he doesn?t take ****
I couldn?t believe it when I heard
The dumbass was beat, that ****ing turd

I may seem too mad
After all, these are my friends
But it?s just too bad
That I care about them
Going to high school
That kid?s gonna be beat
Oh well, at least I got the receipt

He beat his ass
Cause the girl didn?t like it
He beat his ass
Cause he doesn?t take ****
I couldn?t believe it when I heard
The dumbass was beat, that ****ing turd
Last edited by ratmblink123 at Jul 7, 2006,
#3
read the top, dumbass

i think i wanted crit, not hate mail

if its the worst song ever, tell me why
#4
To quote your song "I couldn?t believe it when I heard (this song)" how bad this is. There is nothing in there that sounds like if it was sung would make for a song with any sort of rhythym. It sounds very choppy and like a very short boring story. I also doubt you'd actually want to say "turd" in front of an audience in a song.

Also there are many lines that appear to just be thrown in there to rhyme like the part about smelling the guy that reeks.

I guess it's fine if it's a joke song. You should watch the Family Guy episode where Peter and Lois get high and go to a talent show and sing a song. I think they would beat this one.
#6
Thanks for the crit guys

i wrote this song while my friend was driving us to Taco Smell

So yeah.

I guess the burrito supreme put its crappiness in my music

lol