#1
back to the times
when we where young
chasing each other
just to have fun

hiding and looking
all over the park
climbing and falling
it always leaft a mark

where are this times
and where are you
what can we do

we grow up
each one went on his way
not thinking for a minut about the option to stay

all we got it this faded memory
old picture of you and me

the park is not longer there
and the trees too
everything changed
and how bout you

the marks of the falling
are still here
i hope it wont disappear
Last edited by sasha2music at Jul 8, 2006,
#2
hmm... this isn't bad. There were a few shaky lines rhythm-wise, but that's alright for the most part. This reminds me of "We're Going to Be Friends" by the White Stripes, except a little sadder.

If you have the time, crit mine please: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=389508
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