#1
I am aware of the sun
At least enough to miss its warmth
When it sets
And I can feel the difference between
My rain and your rain
And the distance between
But I am not aware of a loss
Because I never had anything to lose
And I cannot feel the difference now that you've left
Because I was never yours to leave
And while you seperate the atoms we left fused together
I am burning down the equations we built our lives around
As it is, I will hang up my white coat
And take off my gloves
And put down my hopes of ever figuring this out
Last edited by ScarredFaith at Jul 8, 2006,
#3
what did I tell you about it's and its?
love dead like a crushed fly

for those of you who said you'd be interested in hearing my lyrics put to music- I started work on recording an album, if you get in touch with me pm or otherwise I'd be more than happy to fill you in
#7
Loved the first three lines, great intro.

I think the weakest part was the middle, the your rain/my rain, and loss/lose lines, If there's anything I can pick out as lower quality than the rest, it's them. Also, I think 6 lines started with "And", which I thought was too repetitive to not be annoying.

Other than that, another good piece from you. Well done.