#1
The song is still untitled..
this is my second one since the last one sucked hard..
please crit this one (not much better)
but here we go:


[Verse One]


When you said you loved me
I thought: that can't be true?
I knew it weren't though
But i still love you

When you ignore me
it feels like
the sky will fall down
on me, tonight

[Chorus]

When I look at you
I see the future
Babies yelling
Teens on computer

[Verse Two]

When you turn your back on me
I can see the disgust
I knew there was no such thing
So called trust

When you say you hate me
The darkness fall..
But when you really meant it
I hung myself in the mall..

[Chorus]

When I look at you
I see the future
Babies yelling
Teens on computer

[Verse Three]

When your mad at me
There's nothing to do
But remember
I'm meant for you

When you shake your ass at me
I suddenly wake up
It was all a dream
But it still shook me up

[Chorus]

When I look at you
I see the future
Babies yelling
Teens on computer

[Verse Four]

When you say you love me
Without showing hate
I said to myself:
This must be fate!

[Chorus]

When I look at you
I see the future
Babies yelling
Teens on computer

[End]

Please tell the truth!!
#2
as my english teacher once called me "melodramatic sledgehammer"
songs: Left Behind choices
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