#1
Any crit or advice for the future of the song would be greatly appreciated. As of now, I'm thinking of going back to the riff at the beginning (the distorted one at measure 9), then to a 2nd verse, and then to the chorus. From there I don't know.
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#2
I like the verse beginning at measure 17. Everything before that doesn't really go with the song. The 6-4-6-4 thing on the 1st and 2nd strings that is always going on is really kind of bland, and you might consider keeping the same rhythm (it helps keep the song going) but changing the notes every now and then.

As for the future of the song, i'd say do a second verse and then chorus, and then a guitar solo at the Q=155 tempo.

Overall, it's okay, but a little reworking should make it into a good song.

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#3
Thanks, and I crited (?) yours too. I agree this needs a lot of work, and I'll keep posting as I work on it.

Btw, I was planning on the chorus and guitar solo to be at 155 tempo. ^_^
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#4
i liked it, has a very rocky feel to it, i liked the verse, the powertab makes it sound almost oriental, lol, but really nice song, i really want to hear it finished, so post that when its done! crit any of mine if you get a chance please, thanks!!!