its good but the pre chorus doesnt really flow and the bridge is a lil dull but its got potential
Certainly not your best work.
I liked the verse a lot. The lead guitar line sounded really good.
The chorus I liked as well. It was definately your style.
The interlude wasn't bad. The riff starting at bar 55 went well here. Other places I didn't like it too much, but it definately sounded good here.

Meh. Not too bad.
I'd probably work with it a little more.
Because, as much as I hate to agree with the two above me, it did seem a little boring.
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i liked it all, by the end of the song i warmed up to it alot, and i especially liked the bridge, cuz i was expecting some gay build up but i really like that arpeggio instead it made it less predictable, which in this style of music is a rare occurance, also i think the interlude could have been alot more interesting

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More like post-hardBORE!

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I actually like it. This simple and generic yet unique piece from you is unprecedented though! and it's short!

I would change one thing though. I personally think the interlude sounds exponentially better if you change the 1-3-1 chord to 0-3-1 i.e. if it was in standard tuning, play the g string open instead of fretted. sounds SO much better. if you don't understand, i mean change it to this:

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I actually found it rather catchy... kind of an anxious feel to it. It kinda reminded me of a stormy night, or boss music you might here in a nintendo game...but not final boss music you gotta work a little harder to achieve final boss music status
BTW you should keep that chord a diminished chord like you have it, the dissonance better suits the feel of the song.
Last edited by poopikins at Jul 14, 2006,
I've listened to it a couple times now and it's really grown on me. I don't think it's post hard-bore...obviously the gloomy feel is intentionally, and you manage to capture it in a very beautiful and addictive way. The pre-chorus is really cool and melodic... especially at the end of the sections where the two guitars end up sort of interlocking to harmonize. Whoever said it doesn't flow must define flow as even eighth notes or something, because I think it has a real flow to it. The chorus is also really cool, especially in the last two bars where the top guitar sort of breaks rhythm and plays those higher octaves. I actually think it's one of your better songs.

And wait...what's that time signature?...OMG 4/4
Last edited by poopikins at Jul 15, 2006,
The dissonance was a little much, but it really reminded of me of the Bled.
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