#1
i wrote this out of my love affair with goths, the way they are outcast by society, and the way they keep society at bay, i just think they are really cool people, especially amy lee from evanescence, anyway just wondered what anyone thought, no music yet


Verse1
Many roads she has travelled, razed bridges to the ground
A Majestical lost soul that?s never been crowned
The face of an angel with a black and white mask
A girl no-one knows until she has passed

Verse2
Her soul ever dark with a mind full of rage
Her life is a book the same story on each page
The expectation of pain keeps her safe from the world
And this is the life of the panda eyed girl

Chorus
Say hello to the girl with the black panda eyes
With Fallow tear ducts no more can she cry
Say goodbye the girl with the black panda eyes
Invisible to all but the one?s she?s passed by

Verse3
Will you see her again will she catch just one eye
Will she know that you recognize her need for a smile
Is it because she?s different or your chance passed you by
That you ignore the girl with the black panda eyes

Verse4
We all exist in a world of our own
Individuals hiding behind a fear of being shown
Do we truly believe that we lead perfect lives
And is that why we never see??.the girl with the black panda eyes

Chorus
Say hello to the girl with the black panda eyes
With Fallow tear ducts no more can she cry
Say goodbye the girl with the black panda eyes
Invisible to all but the one?s she?s passed by
#3
that would be good, if it wasn't written about goths.
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#4
i like this one. it's really thoughtful and open minded, too bad society is an ignorant hellhole!
#7
great song... i know how it feels, im an outcast....id apreciate if you'd crit my songs "insane" and "not so different from me"
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#8
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Funny how?

because hes uses panda bears to describe dark eyeliner and mascera
#9
I loved this entire song except for one part -

"A Majestical lost soul that?s never been crowned" - I'm not convinced on the word Majestical, it just didn't seem to fit.

Otherwise, AMAZING. Lovely pattern, rhyming, and ideas. Keep up the good work.
#10
I love the song, love the rhyme scheme, love the rhythm, love the figurative language.

10/10

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#12
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so the analagy about panda bears worked, as you said i used pandas to described mascara and dark eyeliner.
#13
OHHHHHHHHHHHH YE4AHHHHHH the girl with the black panda eyes.....woooowww it was sooooooooooooooooo good dude i totally loved it and tooottally undersatnad where yha coming from brooo