#1
I'll paint you a picture
Much too painful to take
Like the one I shot
The day that ambulance carried your father away

And if we're talking too loud it's because
The size of our mouths

I said "I can't pretend to feel good about us
Or the lack there-of"
Well, what did that mean to you?
Did it feel like the truth?
I hope it stung just enough to ruin your day
I know it's sad to act so young

And if he's talking to you then you know what to do
Turn that picture of me you keep in your pocket around
#2
Ahhhhhhh... I like.

Although I didn't catch the title, google came up with some surnames for people and a novel, I think.

But yeh, I enjoyed this one, and for me it's like your back on form

And if we're talking too loud it's because
The size of our mouths

"Because of" I think might go better here

That was about all I can attempt to point out, because I did enjoy this piece, and I love your short and sharp style you have. Good stuff.

"Next Day Problems" if your returning, it can be found here... https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=393343
#3
or the lack there-of doesn't make sense and I know it's sad to act so young to sound like it fit
love dead like a crushed fly

for those of you who said you'd be interested in hearing my lyrics put to music- I started work on recording an album, if you get in touch with me pm or otherwise I'd be more than happy to fill you in