#1
It is what it is.

Dust unto Dust Trails

We watched headlights fall
Fast on country roads
As we kicked up a dust trail
Across the season
Head and hands out the window
We watched ghosts dive
Out of the way of
Our spinning wheels

Maybe that's all
(And maybe that's all)

But something shifted from
This roaring engine to a sputtering silence
And all that's left on these
Country roads are
Ghosts shaped like our shadows

Maybe that's all
We are
(And maybe that's all)

Maybe that's all we are
Are ghosts that dive out of the way
Of this car crash timeline
That will eventually break us apart
Maybe that's all we are
Are ghosts as thin as dust trails
Trying to get away from
These bright headlights

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#2
Bravo old bean; an excellent read. Very vivid images and wonerfully worded too, i think that's the main reason i enjoyed it. Also the length was spot on; not too short not too long.
The only thing i would suggest really is where you have used the word "ghost" more than once, you could use a different description such as "shadowy sillouhette(sp?)".

Other than that thoughit's a great read, very enjoyable. There's just something about songs about roads

Could you lok at one of my latests? Your choice Thanks.
#3
This was good, I enjoyed it. As Callum said, changing a couple of the ghosts would be a good idea; spectre and eidolon could be used instead. There was some good imagery, but you haven't overdone it which is a good thing. Using too much imagery can detract from meaning.

It's got a nice dark country beat, like Johnny Cash. I can imagine his voice suiting this song well.

Could you have a look at Rain, Rain Go Away? The link resides in my sig. Ta very much.
#5
Thanks for the reads, fellas. I can't guarantee that I'll get to your stuff anytime soon, but I'll try.

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