#1
just came up with this, not sure what other people would think, so let me know

Not Quite home

Verse 1
Oh no its happening once again
im losing all my friends
Im standing here all alone
In a place that doesn?t feel like home

Chorus
We?re not quite home yet
We?re not quite there yet
Its gonna be a while

Bridge
you're goin, you're goin, you're goin and you're gone
you're goin, you're goin, you're goin and you're gone
you've left me here just singing my song

Pre-Chorus
bass solo

Chorus
We?re not quite home yet
We?re not quite there yet
Its gonna be a while

Bridge
you're goin, you're goin, you're goin and you're gone
you're goin, you're goin, you're goin and you're gone
you've left me here just singing my song

Verse 2
i want things back the way they were
the way they were before you met her
but once again its all gone wrong
you've let me here singing my song
Just Bass me up!
#2
seemed a bit too simple to me, but i did like verse 2, the bridge could be good depending on how you sing it?, i really didnt like the chorus to be honest, too short, sounds like it would be over before it had begun, i dunno ???, thats wha i think,

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