#1
Hate©

I feel the hatered
It is everywhere
And that's okay
'cose deep inside I know
That the world hates me

I can't sleep
I can't think
I'm forgetting my name
When I see the hatered
Fading away

I see the hatered
Mothers kill their children
And that's okay
'cose deep inside I know
Same fate await me!

I can't sleep
I can't think
I'm forgetting my name
When I see the hatered
Fading away

The age of evil comes
Etrnal fire burn
And that's okay with me
'cose deep inside I know
It'll be Heaven for me!

I can't sleep
I can't eat
I am ready for war
Satan's childer will die
And thou be gone!
Thou be gone!
Last edited by Belthazubel at Jul 17, 2006,
#2
You can comment any time you want. It's ****? Why? It's good? Again, why?
Sometime this millenia will do just fine ^_^
#3
Kind of generic, but workable. By the way, it's spelled 'hatred.'
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#4
i think overall it is a workable piece, my advice to you though if you are looking for soley critque on your works perhaps you should join up here
www.deviantart.com
its an art based community and the sole purpose is for people to show off their work and have others judge it and provide comments and feedback based on what might help with it.

this is just my opinion but if you look it up it may be a bit of a help, something along the lines of over 5 million members cant be all wrong