#1
Can this pain get any worse?
Will my life ever be the same?
Do you know how much this hurts?
Why can't you take this all away?

It seems so easy
To end this now
So can you help me
Figure this out

Just take the pain away (I know you can)
Please help me shed my skin
Will you end my misery (Or will I drown?)
Please help me be myself again

Can you see this is killing me?
And I can't take it anymore
There is something I can't see
There must be something to reach for

It seems so easy
To end this now
So can you help me
Figure this out

Just take the pain away (I know you can)
Please help me shed my skin
Will you end my misery (Or will I drown?)
Please help me be myself again

You did the best with my life
But there was nothing left to save
I've reached the end of this fight
So I close my eyes and fade away
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Originally posted by tyler 417 714
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#2
It's a bit teen-angsty, don't know if that was what you were trying to achieve, but I really like the chorus, especially the "Please help me shed my skin" line and also later on the line "You did the best with my life". Good Job.
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#3
Teen-angsty, huh?

I like that. haha Well the song is kind of angsty...so thanks.

Glad you like it.
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Metal doesn't hold hands, it gets head in the van before the show. Seriously.

Originally posted by tyler 417 714
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There's a band called tool?

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People still watch MTV?
#4
That's ok I saw that you like nirvana and the word "angst" just kinda popped into my head.. anyway, if it's cool with you then pls crit my song "look inside".. it's somewhere on this page
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#5
It seems so easy
To end this now
So can you help me
Figure this out


... i dont know, 'it seems so easy to end this now'? are you having suicidal thoughts? Poor you. Whatever you're going through, i understand. If you ever need anyone to talk to about... get a psychiatrist, those are good man! I (for reasons i can't say) had to go see a psychiatrist and it totally helped me and now im a changed person.

Hey, check out this song and look at the last crit man....
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=392690
#6
To me it would seem like a slow song from the 80's. Like something the Beatles or an old Green Day song. Yea. It's alright. Keep writing songs man. You'll get better. heheheheheheheheheheheh. LOL. Trust me.

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#7
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That's ok I saw that you like nirvana and the word "angst" just kinda popped into my head.. anyway, if it's cool with you then pls crit my song "look inside".. it's somewhere on this page


hahaha that's cool. Yeah I'll crit yours...when I find it I will haha


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It seems so easy
To end this now
So can you help me
Figure this out


... i dont know, 'it seems so easy to end this now'? are you having suicidal thoughts? Poor you. Whatever you're going through, i understand. If you ever need anyone to talk to about... get a psychiatrist, those are good man! I (for reasons i can't say) had to go see a psychiatrist and it totally helped me and now im a changed person.

Hey, check out this song and look at the last crit man....
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=392690


No I'm not suicidal. And people have told me to seek help...and due to a situation last night, I am now seriously considering it. Thanks...I'll get to yours.

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To me it would seem like a slow song from the 80's. Like something the Beatles or an old Green Day song. Yea. It's alright. Keep writing songs man. You'll get better. heheheheheheheheheheheh. LOL. Trust me.

crit for crit?


I guess that's good...haha I have better songs on here...(Overdose is my personal favorite...check that out too)

I'll get to yours soon...thanks for the input
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Metal doesn't hold hands, it gets head in the van before the show. Seriously.

Originally posted by tyler 417 714
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There's a band called tool?

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People still watch MTV?