#1
?MYSTERY GUY?

1st
I saw this guy he was headed my way
when he saw me he quickly turned away
i don't understand why i'm to afraid
to say anything to him all i know is that it was me who i betrayed

Chorus
This mystery guy will i ever be yours?
Will i ever be your girl?
yeah oh yeah-eh-yeah-eh-yeah

2nd
When i saw him i could barely breathe
I couldn't even move at all because he took the air out or me
I don't even know him but i'd love to know
and if he feels the same way i'll scream that i love him so
Chorus
Mystery guy i've always wanted to know
Its too late i had let you go

Bridge
Wander if hes thinking about another girl
Maybe it will be me he'll let me in his own world
I have to know what makes you feel
Like a person that's truely real?

Chorus
Oh mystery guy will i ever be yours? Will i ever be your girl?
Mystery guy i've always wanted to know. Its too late i had let you go.
Mystery guy will i ever be yours? Will i ever be your girl.
Oh Mystery guy i've always wanted to know. Its too late i had let you go~

yeah-eh-yeah-eh-yeah, do do do do do do do do do

Um i'm new so i don't know if i did this right? I hope its pretty good like everybody elses. Also i'm gonna be singing this song in a competition coming up soon, and i can't wait. So i really hope that you like this song and i'd like to get tips for songwriting too, because i'm new at it, and its really fun
Azha Justyne Rivera-Jacinto
#2
First, there is no right and wrong, there only is how it is. That was great for a first timer. I would say it's a bit too repetitive, but that's alright. Some great songs are fairly repetitive and get away with it =p However on the "yeah oh yeah-eh-yeah-eh-yeah" part, I may do something different. Maybe leave it out, until you put it altogether, sing it and just see what comes out when you get to that part. It reminds me of another song... For The Life Of Me, whoever sings it I forget. Other than that, great for a beginner =) Keep writing.
#5
i think that was really good, i mean sometimes lyrics don't look as good when written if you haven't heard them to music, but if you ignore that and imagine those words sung to music it's really good. nice effort