#1
Ghost music, your eyes swallow mine
Summer haze, pale as a line


(gonna run through, catch empty pocket blues, wrong notes in my hand)

diamond strength, don?t be frieghtened now
understand, just don?t listen how


(gonna run through, catch empty pocket blues, wrong notes in my hand)

the same love, like the first love, you want to, feel apart of.
The Same buzz, like the last buzz, in your mouth, with your cut
Ghost music, eyes swallow mine
#2
nice...pretty emotional for a short piece. Nice use of...metaphor?

In my opinion, this could be better as a longer piece, but its fine now too.


Sorry for the crappy crit, but if you have time can you check out mine? The links in the sig if you have time.

Thx and good job.